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Love Dazzles

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He had painstakingly carved out every stone of that jewel box, all the while thinking of her.

It sat there before her dazzling but all she had to offer was a blank look.

Pain, sharp as a dagger, pierced his heart as he saw her turn her gaze away from which she couldn’t take her eyes off once.

He was sure that she would have been dazzled.

If only she remembered him and his love now.

This five sentence fiction is written for the topic ‘Dazzles‘ at Lillie McFerrin Writes.

Until later 🙂

24 Comments

  1. Uma

    Lovely, Keirthana..loved the concept woven. Sorry to nit-pick, you might want to edit the typo in the line “from the it “.
    Glad to have you at the prompt. Yet to do mine..

    • Keirthana

      Thanks Uma! And thanks a lot for drawing my attention to the typo. Corrected it 🙂

  2. Mirage

    A poignant twist in just five lines. How do you do it?!!!

    • Keirthana

      Thanks Vi 🙂

  3. Anita

    “A thing of beauty is a joy forever”.
    Sad that she killed him. Hope she repents after realizing his love.
    Nice story 🙂

    • Keirthana

      That’s another take but that’s not what I intended. My take was that she has amnesia and forgot him and his love. Your take was interesting too 🙂

  4. Aathira

    What a beautiful love story in such few words! Hats off, Keirthana 🙂

    • Keirthana

      Thanks Aathira!

  5. Ankita

    What a touching little story! loved it 🙂

  6. Anusree

    Poignant and heart wrenchingly beautiful.. great take on the prompt Keirthana.. 🙂

    • Keirthana

      Thanks Anusree!

  7. Ajay Kontham

    Nicely penned. Beautiful story. 🙂

  8. Rupasi

    It’s beautiful…!!! :):):):)

    • Keirthana

      Thanks Rupasi 🙂

  9. Soumya

    Like I said before, this was lovely.

    You should write fiction more often! 🙂

    • Keirthana

      Thanks Soumya, I will try to do that 🙂

  10. Bikram

    It is Truth in some life’s ..

    a lovely story ..

    Bikram

    • Keirthana

      True indeed! Thank you 🙂

  11. Tina

    Sad but true for many…
    Tina from The Sunny Side of Life

  12. Confused Soul

    A tale of Amnesia.
    You don’t miss to dazzle by your words 🙂

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